What your writing reveals

Your writing can reveal a lot about you. If you’re the writer for Yahoo! Screen, it can reveal your ineptitude with creating a simple series:

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Your readers would be stumbling on “…she reveals her love of costume parties, good wine, and reveals her hidden rock star talent” because what you wrote is really three items in a series:

“…she:

  • reveals her love of costume parties
  • good wine
  • reveals her hidden rock star talent”

Based on my decades of editing really crappy writing, I believe this is what you meant:

…she reveals her love of costume parties and good wine and her hidden rock star talent.

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2 Responses to “What your writing reveals”

  1. ericjbaker Says:

    If someone hosted an ugly contest, that sentence would win.

    So she reveals her reveals? I’m not sure there is such a thing as “hidden rock star talent,” either. One may have hidden music talent, but a rock star is, by definition, already in the spotlight.

    • Laura Says:

      Ha! I hadn’t thought of the whole “rock star” thing. I was focused on what you correctly identify as “ugly.” I think it’s another case of writing something — anything — just to have some words out there, even if they make no sense and are embarrassing to the writer, the management, and Yahoo!.


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