Blogger says claims too many words

UPDATE: On rereading this, I believe I was mistaken. It is not a case of an extraneous word, but a case of what looks like two verbs when it’s really a case of one verb (says) and a noun (claims). I wouldn’t have been so confuddled if this were: …Putin says that claims…

I think there’s at least one word too many on the Yahoo! front page:

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How did Vera Wang start the trend?

There’s apparently a new trend in wedding gowns. It was started by Vera Wang with “pink and collections.”

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Thank you, yahoo.com writer, for enlightening us.

Devaluing your words

There’s a place for repetition and redundancy in writing. It can help you emphasize an important fact. It can help remind your readers of something of value. But redundancy can also frustrate your readers and leave them with the impression that you’re a careless writer or worse. In the case on the Yahoo! front page, the redundancy makes the writer look a little vocabulary-challenged:

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Since devalue means “to lessen or cancel the value of” (American Heritage Dictionary), “devalue the worth of” means “lessen the value of the worth of.” A tad redundant or maybe just nonsensical.

See pictures before it happens!

Now on Yahoo! Shine you can view pictures of Prince George in “the Australia,” days before he actually arrives!

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Prince George and his parents are scheduled to visit “the Australia” on April 16, but Shine has pictures now of his visit, six days before he arrives!

Watch this!

Do you think the editor was watching the Yahoo! Shine writer compose this headline?

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I hope not. I hope a real editor knows that watch means “to look on” and that the on is redundant. Either “…as Kate Middleton watches” or “…as Kate Middleton looks on” is correct. (Of course, there are those who would also argue that referring to Catherine, Duchess of Cambridge, as “Kate Middleton” constitutes a higher crime.)

Countless errors

If there are so many errors that they can’t be counted, there are countless errors. Here’s just one more on the Yahoo! front page:

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I can’t figure out if “countless numbers” is an oxymoron, but I’m sure that there’s no need for “numbers of.”

Blogger proofreads says proofreading…

What are the odds that someone — anyone — proofread this sentence on the Yahoo! front page?

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I’d say slim to none.

And then I wrote… And then I wrote…

The is from the from the Yahoo! front page:

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Because I wouldn’t have known it was incorrect

Thanks, Yahoo! Sports, for letting me know that the reports of Quinton Ross’ demise were incorrect:

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I would have thought that quoting him was enough to discredit the rumor.

A news source you can trust?

How many typos, misspellings, and wrong word choices does it take before you question the credibility of a news article? If the article is written by a Yahoo! News staffer, I start with an attitude of skepticism, which is buttressed by the errors that are sure to be there.

I can count on there being at least one homophonic error. In this article, the writer claims an ice sculpture was discretely wheeled into a hotel suite:

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Unless that sculpture was delivered in bits of ice cubes, it was brought in discreetly, so as not to attract attention.

A typo in a photo caption isn’t the worst thing you’ll find in the article:

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But a second homophonic error just might be:

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Perhaps it’s a rite of passage at Yahoo! News: You can’t get a byline until you’ve made at least three boneheaded mistakes in a single article.

Here’s a makeshift spelling of makeshift:

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There’s nothing wrong with this paragraph except for the arbitrarily capitalized former and the spelling of Dinesh D’Souza and Cathy McMorris Rodgers:

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Two of those mistakes would get you sent to the woodshed in a legitimate news organization. But wait! There’s more! Here, the writer claims there was a big band consisting of 16 pieces:

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and yet in the photo caption, he’s added a musician:

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Perhaps the writer was enjoying the contents of the kegerator when he wrote this:

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and then forgot that if you use a dollar sign, you shouldn’t also use the word bucks (because that would be “20 dollars bucks”):

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So, I’m not trustin’ too much (if anything) I read from this author. I guess for some, getting an article published is all that matters:

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