I have to keep reminding myself that this is Yahoo! News that I’m reading, and not a high school newspaper. (Frankly, I’ve seen better writing on high school newspapers.) As I read the article I had question after question, but the one that popped up most often was: Was this written by a professional journalist? Sadly, I think it was.
The article has lots and lots of problems, many of which are beyond the scope of Terribly Write and my patience. Here are just a few of my favorites.
Apparently the writer thinks that then is a conjunction. It isn’t. And she thinks the past perfect of run is ran. It isn’t. She should have written this piece, and then she should have run it past an editor:
For some reason she thinks firefighter is two words. It isn’t. It’s not technically wrong to use that to refer to a person, but it is considered rude. She should have used who. I really think she’s misquoting Mayor Gray, don’t you? This gal needs an editor — one should have taken over to correct yet another mistake in the past perfect of a verb:
There are other errors, probably more significant that this incorrect comma:
and this one, which is there just to separate the subject from its verb, I guess: