Do I repeat myself? Do I repeat myself?

What are the chances that this paragraph was proofread by someone at Yahoo! TV? What are the chances that this paragraph was proofread by someone at Yahoo! TV? What are the chances that this paragraph was proofread by someone at Yahoo! TV?

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A shoo-in for Worst Travel Writing of the Day

What makes this article on Yahoo! Travel a candidate for Worst Travel Writing of the Day? It could be this paragraph, which starts out with a non-sentence and then gets a tad repetitive:

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OK, so that was ugly. Maybe it was just a fluke. What could possibly be wrong with this?

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Well, in the first place, the Capital Wheel is not in Washington.  It’s in Maryland. That’s kinda a giant embarrassment. A lesser mistake is referring to the U.S. Capital (the capital of the U.S. is Washington, DC) when the writer meant the building, which is the Capitol.

Finally, the error that made this article a shoo-in for the Worst Travel Writing of the Day trophy:

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So few words, so many mistakes

How many mistakes can you crowd into a single sentence? If you write for yahoo.com, quite a few:

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I can’t understand why the writer abbreviated secretary and capitalized the abbreviation and the word state. According to the Associated Press style (which Yahoo! claims to follow), the title secretary of state should never be abbreviated and is capitalized only when it precedes a name. Maybe the writer was trying to conserve space so that there was room to repeat of the crisis.

Who oversees the editing?

Who oversees the editing of Yahoo! Finance blogs? I’m guessin’ it’s someone overseas — maybe in a non-English-speaking country. How else would you explain this?

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The duplicated about isn’t horrible. And I thought that overseas was a typo until it popped up again in the actual article:

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The real birdbrain

Anyone who is anything but a birdbrain could spot the mistakes in this paragraph from Yahoo! TV’s “Daytime in No Time”:

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How the heck do you not see the redundancy? And how the heck do you knock over a bowling ball? Doesn’t it just roll? (The bird actually used a small ball to knock over miniature bowling pins. But I quibble.)

And then I wrote… And then I wrote…

The is from the from the Yahoo! front page:

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Did I mention October 2010?

Yahoo! Celebrity used to be called omg!, but now we know that it’s a site about celebrities, not about exclamations by tweens. So, you gotta expect you’ll get expert info about celebrities.

Except that you won’t. The writers still can’t spell celeb names:

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The couple’s friend is actually Challen Cates.

They also seem to be suffering from Alzheimer’s. They can’t remember that they already told us about October 2010. And they’re not too swift when it comes to basic arithmetic; July 2012 isn’t two years after October 2010:

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And did I mention October 2010?

I can think of something else that should be cut

Yeah, well, so Ben Stiller cut his daughter from his movie. I can think of something on the Yahoo! front page that should be cut:

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How do you get a job like that?

Imagine having a job where you can make mistakes in front of millions of people and you still collect a paycheck. If you’re a writer looking for a gig where spelling, grammar, and common sense are not required, you could work for Yahoo! Shine.

Really, could you be any worse than the writer who came up with this bit of hooey?

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I don’t know what a couple could do “under” a 22-year marriage. They certainly couldn’t sign a prenuptial agreement under a marriage or even during a marriage. A prenup has to be signed before a marriage because that’s what prenuptial means. But you knew that. Maybe you’re overqualified for Shine.

You probably also know that you don’t form the plural of Jenner with an apostrophe, even if it’s followed by an S. And you likely know that there’s no abbreviation a.ka. because that would make NO sense. When you want to abbreviate “also known as” you use aka or AKA or a.k.a. You don’t make up the spelling of celebrity names; you look them up in that new and whacky online resource known as the Web. So, you’d know how to spell Robin Givens. And you wouldn’t bother with the redundant use of a dollar sign and the word dollars:

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You know that people are wealthy and agreements are not. Agreements are lucrative:

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You wouldn’t make up a name like “the K-Dash line”; you’d go to the QVC site to see that it’s K-DASH by Kardashian. And you’d be aware that the preferred spelling in the U.S. is jewelry:

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And since you’re sensitive to the placement of punctuation, you’d put the apostrophe after daughters (because you’re also sensitive to the fact that Ms. Jenner has more than one daughter). You also like to match a verb (like, say, maybe factors) to its subject (oh, maybe self-promotion):

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If you pay attention to your spell-checker when it indicates that becaue isn’t a word, you may just be overqualified for Yahoo!:

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Reread what you’ve written. Reread what you’ve written

Here are a couple of lessons about writing, illustrated by Yahoo! News. Lesson one: Spell-check your pearls before publishing them. You might find, for instance, that al is not a word:

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The word, derived from Italian for “in the fresh (air),” is alfresco.

Reread the entire article or blog post from start to finish. You might discover a bit of repetition.

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Reread the entire article or blog post from start to finish. You might discover a bit of repetition.

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